I'm beginning to think Milan could write a passably plausible diction for the era and that it's an editorial choice based somewhere in the depths of her publishing house's desire for popularity.

I'd love to see what it looked like if she did. She's good enough with the habits of mind that she gets some near-galloping anachronisms (in attitude, not action) through the text just by not identifying them with modern terms. It would be nice to see that worked out in the language itself.

Also you were supposed to sleep *through* the fever. There was a plan.

I fell asleep afterward! For nearly three hours!