Actually, I almost never hold to 5-7-5 haiku, as it tends to produce bloated crap (like, well, that one). I hold to the Henderson "spirit of the law" idea that 5-7-5 is a maximum in English haiku, and the shorter the better (I still think the best haiku I ever wrote is

salt
trickles
down)

(You have sent in the songs for Lilitu, right?)

I haz! Eagerly awaits reply!